Help Please ,arrangers, producers, soundengineers

I am producing songs for a wealthy man.
however I am unsure weather what i'm making is a "hip" sound
because sums of money are involved Im a little concerned
please download the song below and tell me how to fix it

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Forums: The Bar,

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oOOo ya sorry i had the file name wrong

please help!

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pleaase

Have you considered adding a glockenspeil part?

...or a theremin...they're still really trendy aren't they?

...in fact, I think you should ditch that twiddly widdly guitar part playing over the top right the way through and replace it with a sitar.

thanks

Wee bit busy sounding dude.

couple of the chorus fills seem a bit loose, and agree about the business of the twiddly country guitar, but otherwise a good track, reminicient of bowie, great chorus, breakdown newar the end is gold

// couple of the chorus fills seem a bit loose,

I kinda liked those.

and as foetusboy says above, it gets a bit busy at times, but, again, I didn't actually mind that - it built to a nice big finish.

top marks. great song.

//I kinda liked those.

yeah, they're not bad, just lack of clarity on some of the micing or mixing smudges some of the snare work at certain points- particularly the long fill at 1:10-1:12 and 3:52,
maybe some isolated eq could fix this, at present these seem at odds with the articulateness of the rest of the drum track

it's not entirely repsectful to talk about her as a 'wealthy man'

it's a he!
his name is Ace Spacely and Ive done bout 16 tracks for him now
yeah that fill is coz it was heaps faster and acid when it slows it down